I don't want to ruin the magic here, but I do have a point of order I would like to raise. If the new Anna Avenger is sporting the pencil thin mustache that you so glibly wrote about, I see a goatee rather than just a mustache.
You've done this before; I remember the picture of you in your car where you had shaved via Photoshop because you wanted to see what you would look like. This post had a picture of you driving in your car. Perhaps you had already shaved and it was a before and after post. I couldn't find that post, but I did find this comment in which you admitted shaving your beard.
The reason I am making such a big deal on this point is that when I read this post the first time, what I heard in my head was that you had shaved not only your beard but your mustache. I was expecting to see you clean shaven with only a "pencil thin mustache."
But the image of the new Anna Avenger did not matching the word-picture you had painted.
Perhaps it is too early in the morning. Indeed I haven't had my coffee yet. But I am going to such lengths to make my point because I care about your writing and want to help you hone the craft.
Perhaps you'll have a look at this post from a technical writing perspective and see if the final product could have been tighter?
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You've done this before; I remember the picture of you in your car where you had shaved via Photoshop because you wanted to see what you would look like. This post had a picture of you driving in your car. Perhaps you had already shaved and it was a before and after post. I couldn't find that post, but I did find this comment in which you admitted shaving your beard.
The reason I am making such a big deal on this point is that when I read this post the first time, what I heard in my head was that you had shaved not only your beard but your mustache. I was expecting to see you clean shaven with only a "pencil thin mustache."
But the image of the new Anna Avenger did not matching the word-picture you had painted.
Perhaps it is too early in the morning. Indeed I haven't had my coffee yet. But I am going to such lengths to make my point because I care about your writing and want to help you hone the craft.
Perhaps you'll have a look at this post from a technical writing perspective and see if the final product could have been tighter?